Talk:Dunwall/@comment-16533050-20160608172250/@comment-5607198-20160608190849

there is a difference between elegance and fluff. The original text was overwritten. imagery, on the other, hand, is good, but a wiki (at least one in this style) is the place for CONCRETE imagery, not artistic. We exist to describe the world and recount the information held therein, yes, but not in the same way that a novel does.

While the phrase "in twain" might be good for an in-universe book, or even fanfiction about the game, it will rarely find a place here. Furthermore, "separate" used in conjunction with "twain" sounds less like artistic choice and more like pretension.

Consider "The city is cleft in twain by the Wrenhaven river" or like sentences. even then, however, the sentence will always sound out of place except when other such diction is used.

Good wrtiting is consistent, bad writing has words and sentences that jut out at jagged angles to rip and tear at the eyes of the reader